(贅字) Please be advised that your payment arrived on July 4. (10 words)(簡潔) We received your payment on July 4. (7 words)
(贅字) Please reply to us at your earliest convenience. (13 words)(簡潔) Please reply to us soon. (6 words)
(贅字) During the time that I am in China, my associate, Jimmy Tao, will be your main contact. (17 words)(簡潔) While I am away, my associate, Jimmy Tao, will be your main contact. (13 words)
例如：Dear Mr Stewart
In your previous mail, you inquired about changing our meeting date to November 20. After checking with my boss, Mr. Jay Liu, I am pleased to advise you that we agree to reschedule it to the above mentioned date. （39個字）
Dear Mr StewartAs you requested, we have rescheduled the meeting for November 20. （11個字）
(資訊不完整) Please contact Mr. Chen soon to arrange a meeting.(完整) Please call Mr. Chen at 0709-777-999 or 電子郵件 him at firstname.lastname@example.org soon to arrange a meeting.
(資訊不完整) Our office is very close to your hotel. You can get here in 5 minutes. (5分鐘是只搭車或步行)(完整) Our office is right next/behind/across the street from your hotel. You can get here in 5 minutes. (方位確定對方知道5分鐘是只步行)
Our office is not far away from your hotel. You can get here in 5 minutes by taxi.
(不易讀) Subsequent to your arrival, we will meet with Mr. Wang at his office.(易讀) After you arrive, we will meet with Mr. Wang at his office.
(不易讀) I will call you prior to your departure.(易讀) I will call you before you leave.
(不易讀) I am writing with reference to (or, in connection with) your order #HQ3002.
(易讀) I am writing about your order #HQ3002.
(不易讀) Pursuant to our agreement, I am attaching a draft of our service proposal.(易讀) As we agreed, I am attaching a draft of our service proposal.
(不易讀) As per our discussion, I have arranged a meeting with the JP group for next week.(易讀) As we discussed, I have arranged a meeting with the JP group for next week.
- The affect of dollar increase is limited. （把 “effect” 打成 “affect”）
- Because of the increasing cost of raw materials, we have been forced to raise ourprize. （是 “price” 不是 “prize”）
- We though the goods would arrive this morning. （“thought” 打成 “though”）